Overview
Thank you for submitting your draft proposal. I am attaching Section 1 here. I'm afraid it needs more work - please see my feedback. I had uploaded it to the Draft Submission for Additional Feedback folder but I think you may have missed it.
Please review my feedback, revise Section 1, and submit it with the term plan for the start of the next term.
I will work on your Section 2 and send that to you with feedback.
Thanks