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Portfolio:
One document, includes:
1st draft of nonfiction piece Final draft of nonfiction piece
1st draft of fiction piece Final draft of fiction piece
1 full page reflection/self-evaluation from top to bottom on what you learned this semester and the changes you made to your writing.
I have attached all of the feedback that I received for the nonfiction and fiction works which you can use to make edits for the final drafts. For the nonfiction piece I did not receive any feedback replies but despite this please be sure to make any final edits for the final draft version.
All the Feedback for the Describing a Place Fiction Piece:
Josh Cronin
April 23 at 1:33 PM
Hello,
Your piece does a really great job creating a calm and immersive atmosphere through detailed sensory descriptions. I like how you focus on the small moments, like the feeling of the sand, the sound of the waves, and the changing colors of the sky, because it makes the setting feel very real and peaceful. The pacing also works well for the tone because you allow the reader to slow down and experience the beach the same way you did. The reflection at the end is strong too, as it connects the physical setting to an emotional takeaway in a natural way.
One area you could improve is variation in sentence structure and word choice. Some sentences feel repetitive in rhythm, which can slightly take away from the flow, even though the imagery is strong. You might also consider adding a bit more personal perspective earlier in the piece so the reader connects more deeply with you, not just the setting. Overall, this is a very well-written and descriptive piece, and with a bit more variety and personal voice, it could sound even better! Great writing!
View profile card for Jacqueline Bartoschek Jacqueline Bartoschek
April 23 at 2:01 PM
Hello, I really enjoyed reading your story.
This piece creates a very peaceful and reflective mood. The beach is described in a clear and detailed way, and the use of sights, sounds, and textures helps the reader picture the setting easily. I liked how the waves, sky, and sand are repeated throughout the story because it builds a strong sense of calm and consistency. The ending works well because it connects the memory of the beach to a feeling of relief and mental rest for the narrator. One thing that could improve the writing is cutting down a few repeated ideas so the story flows more smoothly.
View profile card for Ella Akimana Ella Akimana
Sat at 10:15 PM
I liked how your writing really shows things down and lets the reader experience the moment. The details about the movement of the water and the changing sky stood out to me because they made the setting feel natural and continuous.
One thing I'd suggest is adding a bit more variety in how ideas are expressed, since some parts repeat similar feelings. You could also bring in a little more of the narrator's personal thoughts earlier to make the connection stronger.
Overall, you did a great job, which was reflective mood that's easy to picture.
View profile card for Laura Michaud Laura Michaud
Sat at 11:28 PM
Hi Abdulkadir!
What a beautiful story! You did a great job at creating a sense of peace and warmth. I was able to easily picture myself on the beach, experiencing this with you. I love the way you describe how everything looked and felt. I particularly enjoyed how you included the part about picking up the driftwood.
My one critique would be to expand a bit on more things. You set the scene beautifully, but it left me wanting more.
But overall, great job!
View profile card for Arriana Ouellette Arriana Ouellette
yesterday at 2:18 AM
Hello Abdulkadir! I think your sensory writing is excellent! Your story is calm, immersive, and consistent. Your tone is very controlled and your story doesn't feel rushed or chaotic in any way. Although you don't state this, I feel the need for escape and quite healing. I think you could improve this by adding some movement to the story. Right now it feels static because you use mostly descriptive language. If you added a clearer internal shift, you could improve this.
View profile card for Faysal Ali Faysal Ali
yesterday at 9:45 PM
Hello, this story is very thoughtful. I love how clear everything is and the attention of sensory as well. The pacing was well done as well, the only thing I would change up is the repetition.
View profile card for Alexyia Talarico Alexyia Talarico
yesterday at 9:54 PM
Hi,
I love the beach and your story does a good job of immersing the reader into the story through their senses. Reading your story reminded me of times I went to the beach with my grandparents and found sand dollars. When you said that it reminds you of places, even if they are just memories, that everything can slow down, is so true.
One thing I may add to this description is some personal attributes, or memories, like you mention. Overall, this was a very immersive description and I enjoyed reading!
View profile card for Cassidy Adams Cassidy Adams
yesterday at 10:13 PM
Hey Abdulkadir,
You did a nice job on your fiction piece! You painted the scene of where you were for us well. It seems like a place that holds importance or significance to you. Maybe for a nostalgic reason, but at least for me it is noticeable and nice. One suggestion I have is adding a variety of sentence structure and lengths throughout your writing. There's a quote that stood out to me towards the beginning. It reads, "It felt hidden then, and it still felt hidden now in my memory, like a place the world had forgotten." This is a quote I'm going to be thinking about, it is memorable. Great piece of writing.
-Cassidy A
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