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https://forms.gle/Xrw1WaFWJPYLVU6UADear Ibtisam,
I have carefully reviewed your submitted thesis (Chapters 1–5). While I can see that you have made some efforts to improve the work based on previous feedback—particularly by adding theoretical perspectives and completing the overall structure—there are still several important issues that must be addressed before this work can be considered acceptable.First, the overall length and depth of the thesis are not sufficient. Each chapter is extremely short (approximately 3–4 pages), which is not acceptable at the MBA level. A research thesis requires deeper analysis, stronger argumentation, and more detailed development of ideas. At this stage, the work appears superficial rather than academically rigorous.
Second, the research problem and research gap are still not clearly defined. You describe the importance of leadership and creativity, but you do not clearly explain what is missing in previous studies or what new contribution your research brings. This is a critical issue that must be addressed.
Third, the literature review, although better structured than before, remains largely descriptive. You need to critically discuss prior studies, compare findings, and provide stronger justification for your model—especially the mediating role of psychological empowerment.
Fourth, I have serious concerns regarding your data collection. You mention that you collected data using a questionnaire, but:
I did not receive your questionnaire for validation (no link, no draft)
I did not approve any measurement instrument,
The scales used are not clearly presented or properly referenced.
This is a major issue. You cannot proceed with data collection without validation of the instrument. You must clearly state:
Which scales you used,
Their original sources (with proper references),
The exact items included in your questionnaire.
In addition, you are required to send:
The full questionnaire used,
The Excel file (raw data) that clearly proves that the data was actually collected.
Fifth, Chapter 5 is not acceptable in its current form. It still contains instructions instead of actual academic content. The discussion, conclusion, managerial implications, and limitations are not properly written. This chapter must present a real interpretation of your findings, not guidelines on how to write it.
Sixth, the reference list is very limited and does not reflect the key literature in your topic. You must include and properly cite major authors related to transformational leadership, psychological empowerment, and employee creativity.
Finally, the document still contains formatting and template issues (e.g., “Page No.”, “Title of Table Here”, and irrelevant sections such as questionnaire evaluation forms). These must be removed, and the document must be properly finalized.
At this stage, the work is incomplete and requires significant revision. Please take this feedback seriously and work on improving the academic quality, depth, and rigor of your thesis.
I expect a revised version that clearly addresses all the points mentioned above, along with the required documents.