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essay is a bit confusing because you appear to be arguing two different things. You begin by arguing Descartes' mind-body dualism, but then you start to argue his method of doubting, then you go back to the mind-body dualism. To make things easier to understand, I would just argue one. The main idea of your paper seems to be focused on the mind-body dualism. If this is the case, then I would remove the sections about his method of doubting, for it does not seem relevant to the mind-body dualism argument. 2. Make sure you are very clear on the stance you are taking regarding Descartes' mind-body dualism. In several passages you speak of "supporting" Descartes' argument, but then you bring in sources that seem to argue against it. All the philosophers you bring in seem to criticize Descartes' mind-body dualism. So, if your goal is to criticize Descartes, just make that very clear in the introduction. 3. Regarding the philosophers you are using. I wanted you to use only two other philosophers in your paper. You mention two in your introduction, but it appears you are using at least four for the dualism argument (on even more for the doubting argument). If you are having trouble meeting the minimum five-page limit, I will let you use three other philosophers but no more. This means you have to go into much more detail of what each of those philosophers are trying to say. As of now, you briefly mention their position.you need to go into much more detail on how they criticize Descartes and how they prove he is incorrect in his dualism position.