Political Science Question

4. Depth in Policy Analysis

• The policy discussion is present but could benefit from:
  • More explanation of how policies are implemented.
  • Discussion of challenges with enforcement.
  • How public health and Indigenous communities have specifically responded to policies.

  • Instruction Element	Met?	Comments
    Clear environmental issue selected	✅	Strong choice with Northern Quebec mining
    25–30 year historical scope	✅	History and changes are traced well
    Civil society and policy impacts	✅	Solid discussion, but can go deeper
    Public health/economic elements	⚠️	Briefly mentioned, could be expanded
    Analysis depth	⚠️	Good, but needs more critical evaluation
    Organization and clarity	⚠️	Needs editing for flow and sentence clarity
    Proper citation and sources	⚠️	Needs verification, variety, and reference list

    1. A Logical Discussion that is Clear AND Consistent and Well Balanced

    Strengths:
    • Your argument flows in a generally logical structure: introduction → background → change → conclusion.
    • You address both government policy and civil society, which shows balance.
    • You bring in economic and environmental dimensions — this is a strong point.
    Needs Improvement:
    • Some parts contain awkward or unclear phrasing that affects clarity (e.g., “terminate raw materials storing carbon-intensive mixture…”).
    • Some sentences are long and wordy, making the flow a bit uneven.
    • ✅ Partially met. The structure is sound, but sentence clarity and flow need polishing for a truly "polished" result.

    • ❌ 4. Address Grammatical Errors, Spelling Mistakes, and Poor Organization

      Issues Noted:
      • Grammar errors appear frequently:
        • "This area is comprised of minerals..." → “This area contains minerals...”
        • "mine" used incorrectly instead of “mining”
        • “Also this plan of action...” → “This plan of action also...”
      • Run-on sentences and awkward phrasing are common, such as:

        “Some extraction entities terminate raw materials storing carbon-intensive mixture and overweight conductive feedstock such as mercury and lead into green spaces.”

      • Some paragraphs are overly long and lack internal breaks or transitions.
      ❌ Not fully met. The grammar and phrasing issues could trigger a deduction of up to 10%, based on typical university policy. You need to proofread and revise for clarity.